It looks great RUCCUS. I can help perhaps in your presentation comments. Unfortunately many people [such as the ones looking at and judging your portfolio] equate incidents of cursing with immaturity. I know, I KNOW, that such judgments are foolish, BUT it is also a very real sticking point.
I don't know how much trouble it would be for you to do this, but if your intention is to have art professors look it over then I recommend that you go back and remove even the moderate obscenities.
Also, instead of pointing out your weaknesses -- such as cheeks, for instance -- simply state that you are correcting faults in the cheek areas. Oh, and remove the reference to laziness. That is nothing that an art instructor or professor wants to hear from the mouth of a student. It's good that you pointed out that you had only two days [I think that was what you said] and so the work was necessarily rushed and therefore a rough in nature.
What can I say? It's a great video segment and I like your music selection as well. Really, only your written script needs tweaking, I think; and then only if it would not require a great deal of extra work on your part. Overall . . . excellent!
Eternal student in search of knowledge. But will settle for the occasional epiphany.
