First off, Haliop and Tech, in my opinion your respective ideas are to "wordy". To much text going on. You're making an Ad, not a brochure... Cut back on the text as a busy reader won't take the time to read it.
Second, way back when - many, many moons ago, I was taught a thing or two about sales. While I've never been much of a salesman, I have learned a thing or two about it and the first thing I was taught was that:
Features don't sell a product, the
Benefits do. With that in mind, consider this contribution:
Quote: "
Build your Game with the ease of a mouse click. Paint your way to perfection by constructing unique Game Entities for your game world and combine multiple game mechanics to create an entirely new genre!
You can do all that with S3GE: Super 3D Game Engine - A fully equipped Hi-Tech game engine created by gamers; for gamers to create their own "perfect" game!
"
In the above, I've taken both of your respective ideas and identified what I see are the benefits and "exemplified" those. You can, of course, add *bling* with graphics and a logo but don't over-do it...
That's my suggestion.
JTK
