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FPSC Classic Product Chat / Storyline

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PekelaarSFX
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Posted: 5th May 2011 14:37 Edited at: 5th May 2011 14:38
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Heya Everyone,

I have been busy with storywriting for a while now, And i thought that i should share it with you. So I've made a small, yet a Effective Guideline for you to create a nice looking story.

Download Is attached.

Hope you like and criticism is always welcome,

- PekelaarSFX

PekelaarSFX - Storywriter & Audio Designer.
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bobochobo
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Posted: 6th May 2011 18:55
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It looks like a decent guide but it doesn't look professional
Fix those ''i''s.

Quote: "there are numerous Zombie-shooter games on the Board."

What board?

You've randomly capitalized words like do and enjoy.

Quote: "zmobie opocalypse"


Quote: "Who is he"

Quote: "What are his motives"

Quote: "Was he there"

That is basically sexism, I know it's not intended but it should be ''the character''.

But other than that it's good for a first guide, just needs some tidying up.

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Vent
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Posted: 6th May 2011 19:16
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I haven't downloadeed it, but it seems you have some spelling errors to fix, still thanks

I wouldn't call it sexism, people (including myself) often use male terms like that, it just happens.



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xplosys
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Playing: FPSC Multiplayer Games
Posted: 6th May 2011 19:46 Edited at: 6th May 2011 19:48
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Life lesson #13: Spelling counts!

Not many will take you serious with your atrocious spelling and grammar. When you offer a "guide" to something, you present yourself as being authoritative on the subject matter. If I can't get through the first paragraph (even the title is grammatically incorrect) without a half dozen mistakes, I just can't take you serious.

It needs some work. Looks nice though!

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bobochobo
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Posted: 6th May 2011 20:16
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Quote: "Not many will take you serious with your atrocious spelling and grammar"

Hypocrite . Jokes, everyone makes mistakes. I use Opera as it has a built in spell check

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