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Hey everyone, thought I'd drop by and post a story Spectrum Red is working on, this seemed like the appropriate section to post in. So, here it is:


The Hook Some say theEchelon doesn’t exist. Well, I’m here to say it does. My name is Max Brooks, former Lieutenant in theEchelon. I left when I came across some files I wasn’t supposed to see. Crazy stuff was listed in those files. Stuff that makes you sick to your stomach. theEchelon used to be a respectable organization only known to the government. I didn’t know the government could endorse such acts as manslaughter. My life just got way complicated.
The First Plot Point/The Inciting Incident When I came across those files of accounts of all the people theEchelon has killed, I took immediate action. I tried to go to the President, he wouldn’t see me. Could he be behind these secret, hanus attacks too? What were the attacks for? I tried to dig deeper, but not a whole lot showed up. Who was orchestrating these attacks against small Iran villages?
The Midpoint I finally dig too deep, attack theEchelon night guards and break into the main frame where everything is stored with a stolen key card. I get busted and put in prison for life, charged with false accusations but theEchelon gets away with it. I spend year after year letting my life rot away in a dirty prison cell for nothing. It’s time to strike. I use my highly trained skills that I learn from theEchelon and attack during dinner the next day after I hatch my plan. I steal a gun and make my way through the prison, lifeless prison guard bodies dropping by the second at my hand. I know I had done it now.
The Second Plot Point/Point of No Return Upon breaking out of prison, I jack a bus that was delivering new prisoners. I end up becoming The Nation’s Most Wanted person on the list. theEchelon doesn’t find me due to my secret tactics I picked up during training with them. I get a new identity, but I still seek revenge on theEchelon, they took years of my life away, my family, my son, my beautiful wife. I’ll kill every single one of them with my bare hands. And that’s what I do.
The End I end up flying back to Washington, a different man, my identity changed. I infiltrate theEchelon base and kill everyone in my way. I find the files and upload them to the Internet, publicly. I make my way to the Chairman of theEchelon and tell him my story, finally stating that theEchelon is going down because I already uploaded the files. He pulls a gun on me but I draw first and send a shot point blank into his head. I go home, kiss my wife, play some catch with my son, and let the past fly away.

Epilogue theEchelon gets taken down. I’m no longer wanted. My life gets back on track.
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theEchelon by Spectrum Red is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial-NoDerivs 3.0 United States License.

Is this an attempt to copyright a story idea? If yes, it doesn't work that way.

Let me take another guess: You posted the exact unmodified text across as many game developing (and other media) boards you could find and register today?

Anyway this here is the wrong board. I would advise you to take a single generic screenshot and open a WIP thread - but you don't know FPSC, let alone owning a copy.

Why are you posting this story?



He refered to himself in the 3rd person, this feels a little fishy.

Unless you are using FPS creator for this project and have some screenshots, this isn't the "appropriate section".