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anayar
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Posted: 3rd Dec 2012 05:38 Edited at: 3rd Dec 2012 05:41
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Alright,

So Ive been in this phase where Im writing a lot of poetry, and I didnt see anything on these boards for that so here we go
I personally believe poetry has to rhyme, otherwise its just prose. But ofcourse I am no literarilly important figure to decide that
but all my poems rhyme

Anyways, Im just gonna post what I wrote today; Maybe y'all have some thoughts about it? I know this is a board of computer geeks but still!
And feel free to post your creations here as well, thats always fun!!!


Daisy:

I remember that daisy
Swaying lightly in the breeze
How in that moment it towered
Over time that would freeze

With the first whistle of bullets
And the answering call
That came from afar
From on top of a wall

We took aim and fired
Eyes sharp as French knives
Only one thing desired
The end of their lives

See the men as they fell
Straight into the ground
From our perch as we watched
It seemed, without a sound

And I began to wonder
Maybe what if, you see
The sting is not really
The end of the bee

Where now a man lay dying
In time flowers would be
And maybe that daisy
Was once a man like me?

By Abhi Nayar


Cheers,
Anayar


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Posted: 3rd Dec 2012 09:31
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Sometime I'll dig up my good ol poem I wrote in the posting compo a while back and put it here.

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Posted: 3rd Dec 2012 10:24
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You have no idea how long it took to find these. All credit to le gay (the old meaning) DBD79.

"A Piece In The Eye"
by: dbd79



Once upon a time,
i was on the computer...
and i was printing a document,
the printer had a fit,
it went oh so fast,
and it disintegrated
and a piece went in my eye!!
so i cleaned the mess,
got a new printer,
fixed my eye,
and i was on the computer again...
i was typing a word document,
i was typing,
typing,
typing away,
oh so fast,
the keyboard disintegrated
and a piece went in my eye!!
so i cleaned the mess,
got a new keyboard,
fixed my eye,
and i was on the computer again...
i was saving a word document,
the hard drive was rattling,
rattling away,
oh so fast,
the hard drive disintegrated
and a piece went in my eye!!
so i cleaned the mess,
got a new hard drive,
fixed my eye,
and i was on the computer again,
only, this time with safety goggles...
i was highlighting text,
in a word document i had,
i was getting frustrated,
i hit my head on the desk,
oh so hard,
the goggles disintegrated
and a piece went in my eye!!

Copyright © 2012 Stupid Poems Media Inc.



The Rock

I was walking the other day...
I saw a rock
sitting there,
alone in the field of grass...
I took a look at it,
a good look i tell ya!
I looked,
and looked,
and looked,
something on it caught my eye...
That one thing that caught my eye,
that one little detail about that rock that caught my eye,
that one little detail that made such a peculiar look come across my otherwise boring face
was the rather stunning fact that i what i was looking at was in fact a rock.
So I stared.
I decided that at that moment in time the best thing to do was simply to look at the rock.
To stare at it.
To gaze at it.
To burn a hole through it with my eyes.
To burn a hole...
To burn a hole...
To BURN a hole...
through that rock...
Oh how i wanted to burn a hole through that rock with my eyes!!
I stared.
I stared.
I stared at that rock like it was going out of style.
I stared at the rock.
And stared,
and stared.
The rock looked the exact same as it had when i first laid my eyes on it.
I realized that this was no ordinary rock.
It was evil.
Pure evil.
And i couldnt stand the pure evil of the rock!!!
I began to hate the rock!
I hated it!
Hated it with all that i was!
I ran forwards at top speed to the rock!
To the rock!
I came to a spontaneous stop next to the evil rock
i bent down
I firmly placed one hand on to the rock.
Firmly.
Very, very firmly,
onto that rock.
Then i placed my other hand firmly,
right smack onto the rock.
It made a very assertive sound as it made contact with the rock.
Boy was i happy about that sound i made!
I knew then i was getting revenge on that rock!!
In all my excitement i realized the rock was still there.
It was still there.
I had to do something about the rock.
It had to be destroyed!
I became very angry at the rock again.
Seething.
Teeth clenched.
Still bent down with my hands placed very firmly indeed on the rock
I forcefully stood up and with all that and i was i lifted the small rock above my head!
I had to destroy the rock.
I began to spin around
i spun around
i spun
very fast.
After several spins and when i was facing the opposite direction to the one that i was before,
i firmly planted my foot into the ground.
Then the other foot.
Very, very firmly.
I again lifted the rock above my head
I swung the rock down to the ground with all that i was,
the rock hit the ground.
It shattered explosively
into hundreds of pieces.
I was satisfied.
Oh so satisfied!
A giant grin populated my face!
I began to giggle.
Then laugh.
I laughed and laughed...
Like it was going out of style.
I looked up.
I looked up...
I looked up...
There, staring right at me,
I had apparently gathered my self a little audience.
My face warmed up.
At a loss for words i realized that all of these people likely thought i was possessed...
Not having any clue what to say,
I walked forwards
slowly
to the crowd...
They were all staring at me.
I felt like an idiot.
One person stepped forwards to me.
He said,
"What you did just now was pretty cool and awesome and all but have you noticed the piece of rock in your eye?"

By dbd79
Dedicated to LeComet


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Phaelax
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Posted: 3rd Dec 2012 11:54
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Roses are red,
Violets are blue.
I hate poetry,
how about you?

~Phaelax


"You're not going crazy. You're going sane in a crazy world!" ~Tick
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I remember when i went trough that phaze where i wrote poetry. i was like that angsty 16year old kid. I wrote 2 depressing poems and i realised they sucked and then the phase ended with that. and i wont share my poetry with you guys because its bad.

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anayar
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Posted: 3rd Dec 2012 14:36
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@TheComet: Woah those are some pretty deep ones haha no but seriously Dark Basic Dude, you got skills man

@Phalaex: Dang, well... It was worth a shot?

@PAGAN: Haha I know what you mean but hey, theres no way it can suck since its so much of a personal experience but if you don't feel comfortable, don't worry about it!

Cheers,
Anayar


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Posted: 3rd Dec 2012 14:50
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Well i dont really have them anymore, maybe if i look hard enought trhough my archives of schoolwork that i preserved since then maybe ill find them. One thing i remember is one was called "Black fire" it was some symbolic poem about anger and hate or something. Well as far as i know we all go trough that phase of angsty emo poetry writing

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Posted: 4th Dec 2012 01:06 Edited at: 4th Dec 2012 01:17
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Oh thank you Comet! You get the Dark Basic Dude searching for poems written by me that were humorous and were in a long ago part of the posting competition award! Enjoy it!


Quote: "haha no but seriously Dark Basic Dude, you got skills man"
Oh thanks! Normally I'm not that good, but that was a poem I had developed in my head over a few years and finally posted it. xD

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Posted: 4th Dec 2012 17:43 Edited at: 4th Dec 2012 17:48
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I've written the shortest poem ever! Well it's more of a riddle.
Quote: "Green to red, then drop down dead."


And now for some random pretentious abstract poetry:

Lights!...
above, below, beside, outside, inside... emptiness
cold, hard pavement
cigarette butts with last nights smoke
leaves stamped into the concrete, unmoving in the wind
did I dream of you?
Bacon sandwiches


Shh... you're pretty.
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There once was a coder on this forum.
Who did not care much for decorum.
He trolled all the posts,
Produced garbage on most,
And the Mods had a big NOOB SLAP for him.

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If we cannot find Osama, bomb Iraq.
If the markets hurt your Mama, bomb Iraq.
If the terrorists are Saudi
And the bank takes back your Audi
And the TV shows are bawdy,
Bomb Iraq.

If the corporate scandals growin`, bomb Iraq.
And your ties to them are showin`, bomb Iraq.
If the smoking gun ain`t smokin`
We don`t care, and we`re not jokin`.
That Saddam will soon be croakin`,
Bomb Iraq.

Even if we have no allies, bomb Iraq.
From the sand dunes to the valleys, bomb Iraq.
So to hell with the inspections;
Let`s look tough for the elections,
Close your mind and take directions,
Bomb Iraq.

If Shirak is not your mama, bomb Iraq.
And if Shreder`s not your papa, bomb Iraq.
Even if the oil is buning,
Main in life is money earning,
Look! Saddam is pale turning!
Bomb Iraq.

While the globe is slowly warming, bomb Iraq.
Yay! the clouds of war are storming, bomb Iraq.
If the ozone hole is growing,
Some things we prefer not knowing.
(Though our ignorance is showing),
Bomb Iraq.

So here`s one for dear daddy, bomb Iraq,
From his favorite little laddy, bomb Iraq.
Saying no would look like treason.
It`s the Hussein hunting season.
Even if we have no reason,
Bomb Iraq.
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Some extra
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OBese87, I am impressed by your depth. Awesome!

Here is one I love from back in my Army days...

A yellow bird
with a yellow bill
landed on
my window sill

I lured him in
with crumbs of bread
and then I smashed
his yellow head.

Brian.

!retupmoc eht ni deppart m'I !pleH

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I'd have to dig mine out, but I hate most of mine, they were written as a teenager and the ones I still like would break the AUP. So it's a dilemma. Generally I write prose and try to stay clear of poetry, it's very rare of me to get the inspiration to write one.

However, I do have a song I wrote, where Odin and Vidar get drunk and Odin sings (set at the start of Ragnorok). It was a part of some experiment - prolly not very good writing in literary terms *shrugs*. But its in some pidgin language I pieced together and I doubt anyone will understand it, I think the Scandinavians on the forum have the best chance.

Vida, Vidar, þú mitt-Burr!
Loka, Loki, vil dey-ja!
Drekk, Drekka, den mjoð!
Og við skall...
Oðlask, Oðlask og Oðlask,
Den Bardagi!
Drekk, burr, drekka!
Og drekka den mjoð!
Og við er sterkur!
Drekk, drekka, den mjoð!
Og Oðlask og við drepa -
Loki, Loki
Og han vil deyja!

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Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I can't rhyme,
Stinky poo.

Oh come on. We're trying to talk with sigs here and you rudely interrupt.
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My poem is very modern, hope no one minds:

"Silence" - by nonZero

... .... ... .. .... .... .. ...,
... .. .. ..... .. ... .. .... ..
... ... .... .. ....... ..... ...,
.. . .... ... .. . ..... .... ...
...... ... ... ...... .. ... .....,
. ... ... . ... .. .

I welcome constructive criticism.

RP Functions Library v1.0

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@ NonZero

I think its good, but it is way to noisy.

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@ nonZero

That last line should end with an exclamation mark! Then you really make your point...
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@Nonzero
My one critique would be: ...

Shh... you're pretty.
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This is rather depressing, but letting out sadness is one of the points of writing isn't it? Definitely not the finest piece of poetry, but hey, gotta practice and get critique to get better, right? This was written quite a while ago, but I haven't written much since. maybe this will inspire me to write a little more. I wasn't sure if I was writing a song or a poem while I wrote this, and it reflects a little. Fair warning

I Let You Push Me Away

I never know what to say.
I just let you push me away.
Just sat there and said “I’m okay”.

I’ve always tried to stray from that path you lay.
But I can’t escape, to this day.
The fence you built just stands too high.
I climb and fall, again and again.
Find a wall to bang my head.
You left me one day, hung up to dry.

I never know what to say.
I just let you push me away.
Just sat there and said “I’m okay”.

You hurt me a lot, one day.
A lot of pain, a lot to take.
But I took it in, it never came out.
I lay at night, and fight fight fight.

There’s a song out there,
Where a man tries to find a special note.
He whispered it softy then took her by her hand.
I just have these lyrics.
Brought to me by my midnight lunics.
Sometimes I want to be mauled by a bear.
But then I know there’s hope out there.

I never know what to say.
I just let you push me away.
Just sat there and said “I’m okay”.

I hear these songs all day.
They remind me of you,
Yes they do, yes they do.
As if on cue, the memories fly.
I try to contain them, oh I try.
But always I fail, I try not to cry.
I already did so much, it would just come up dry.

You know who you are.
This is about you.
Everyone will ask, “Who”, “who”, “who”?
That is, everyone but you.

I never know what to say.
I just let you push me away.
Just sat there and said “I’m okay”.

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And now... for something completely different:

There once was an NPC
Who pleaded for mercy
The player gave none
And fired his gun...
It was all done in FPSC
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I have a cat.
Her name is Robert.
Her fur is red.
She works in Walmart.
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And now for an attempt at proper poetry...

Nature

The gentle rustle of the leaves
That shimmer in the sunlit breeze
And all around is full of song
But us we must not gaze too long
Upon this scene of gold and green
Or lest we unhinge beauty's screen

Within the shadows death comes quick
To cull and quash the weak and sick
In beauty's name is entertained
Much struggle for such little gain
Beneath this veil of green and gold
Where dreadful secrets lie untold



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Obese87's ultra page-stretch code snippet

Obese87 posted a snippet,
on a day I was wearing a tippet.
Expanding its contents revealed to me
that it stretched the page as wide as Obese87's tummy.

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Untranslatable but awesome
Quote: "Умом Россию не понять,
Аршином общим не измерить.
Записка "Стол окрашен".
Нет нужно пальчиком проверить!"
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Tks for the critiques Norion & elbow. Will try harder to find my "voice" in the next one.

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