Quote: "I'd really work on Trixie more though. Trust me, it's something that readers get very picky on when characters aren't introduced quite right."
I'm working on that right now.
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I know it's not qute right so I'll bee going throught it a lot. Anyways right now I've got Trixie down right pathetic. Think it's an okay path?
Quote: "They're creatures of pure shadow, not ponies, and as a result can't even recognise the Harmony Elements?"
hey that's pretty good
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I suppose I could say, as it drafts off of the rest of the story, that the shadow ponies were really meant to be a counter to the elements, as Luna knew they were a threat to her, but her goal had to be completed, and if she failed the not-ponies could claim equistria and place her back on the throne. Unfortunately, she went all good, but feared to mention the ponies, that part's a little iffy. But hey! At least I THINK I have a cool ending
Edit: Maybe the story will be a little more understandable now as I fixed like 40 typos in the first section
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The second part is still all over the place though
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needs lots of work.
swis
No, it's not pokemon.
Joined: Tues Dec 16th 2008